Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025P11: Clear, concise writing. Story could start a little sooner, perhaps starting before the death happens so readers understand why it had to happen and get more set-up first. Prologue may not be necessary. 130
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL12: MG Fantasy. MC's goal is clear, but summary is quite short and could be longer to explain plot better. What is their motivation? What internal conflict do they struggle with and why? Is their past unknown to them, and if so, why? 130
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025P12: Writing is good, especially in describing setting and world. I want to know more about MC in opening pages. What do they want in life? What are they struggling with? 130
