Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL11: Adult Fantasy. Cool concept. Excited for the romance. MC's primary story goal could be clearer. What is their mission for most of the book after the inciting incident occurs? QL needs trimming (P1 is long) and more recent novel comps. 140
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025P11: Clear, concise writing. Story could start a little sooner, perhaps starting before the death happens so readers understand why it had to happen and get more set-up first. Prologue may not be necessary. 130
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL12: MG Fantasy. MC's goal is clear, but summary is quite short and could be longer to explain plot better. What is their motivation? What internal conflict do they struggle with and why? Is their past unknown to them, and if so, why? 130
