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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q5: Some details unclear. Initial wording suggests MC's friend dies, so why is MC seeking them? Confused about “magic” system and what their abilities are. How does magical traveling affect plot? P5: Interesting worldbuilding. Love a dystopia. Want more MC motivation and goal insight.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q6: MC and setting intrigue me, but Q is vague. Why does MC come here? What is inciting incident specifically? What is MC’s motivation? Any writing/career info to add to bio? P6: Juicy tension right away, but want gradual buildup. Good MC interiority. Need more backstory on location and MC arrival.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q7: Polished query and strong pitch. If anything, might love a line drawing out MC’s arc/emotional stakes further. Add comp authors. P7: Backstory/context woven into present action well. Curious if this opener is best, though, especially with gore description. MC is a little passive, too.

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