Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL16: YA Fantasy. Unique premise and worldbuilding. But needs more info about main plot. Does MC flee home or not? Do creatures pose a threat? If not, what is the threat? Why is MC's story goal a secret at first? 120 0
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025P16: Story starts in good place. Nice descriptions of setting and magic system. Feeling connected to MC. Overall, strong start and I think readers will crave more. 120 0
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL17: Adult Book Club. MC's motivation and story goal are clear. What is at stake if MC finds their desired object at the end of the quest vs. if they don't? Looking for stronger connection to gender and defiance themes in the story summary, if possible. 140 0
