Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL5: YA Fantasy. QL conveys sweet tone. Could use more clarification. Is the MC's boss the same as the group's leader? And does the MC unravel a conspiracy with their love interest? And could use more specific MC goal and stakes for external plot. 140
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025P5: Good context and sense of MC's drive. Could use a slower buildup to first scene's climax so we understand why their last resort must happen. Would love more worldbuilding, magic system description and more set-up for MC before second scene. 130
Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 11/04/2025QL6: Adult Contemporary. MC's story goal and motivation are clear. I want more insight with their inner conflict and their external conflict with the family. Perhaps P1 can be cut to create room to expand on P2, especially with for last line (the stakes). 140
