iiinova — where your digital self keeps evolving

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q17: Adventurous premise. Not sure first paragraph is necessary. How does MC arrive in new place? What are stakes if MC’s truth is exposed to team? P17: I would back story up so that readers see MC’s life before new realm. More backstory about their life would help show contrast in new reality.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q18: Spooky premise. I’m not sure what catalyst is for MC to reinvestigate. Needing new purpose? An unexpected reminder of past? And why is victim’s BFF suspect? P18: Story starts too late, I think. Readers might want more insight into MC’s current life before jumping into such an intense part.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q19: Logline interested me, but pitch too short. Be more specific. What activities is MC restricted from? Expand on external plot. Who is MC trying to save and why? How does external plot draw out inner conflict? P19: Good writing. Would love stronger hint of MC want.

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