iiinova — where your digital self keeps evolving

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q2: Love premise. Explain how comps are similar. Pitch feels too short. Which abilities is MC struggling with? Which past hardships? Need stronger hint of arc in 1st pitch paragraph. P2: Prologue starts strong, but I wanted a stronger hook as last line/takeaway. Is MC hiding pain? If so, hint why.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q3: Good high concept plot. QL is long, so consider cutting paragraphs 4,5, & 7. What is the story’s genre? Is it YA? If so, word count seems too low. P3: Balanced & engaging first pages. Not sure if story starts in the best place, as MC’s grief somewhat overwhelms their motivation and character.

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Hannah Kate Kelley @kelleyeditorial.bsky.social · 10/04/2026

Q4: Great opening and comps. Pitch is short. What are some of MC’s mini-goals? What are stakes? How does publicizing aspect affect plot? P4: Does story start after inciting incident? Because seems like MC is already adventurous. Backstory is interesting, but not hooked just yet.

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